Prolog to the novel i am writing.
Posted: Wed May 08, 2013 7:30 pm
Hey ch, im writing a trilogy to be published - let me know what you think of the prolog and any improvements i can make:
Within the abandoned realms of the Kaag King's lands lays very little life. For the mojority of the time, the only sound is but gushing winds tossing and turning the rotten leaves from beneath the dead oak trees. The dry, cracked landscape of Neihram will once again be home to the most feared and elite warriors ever to be risen by a Kaag King. Evil lurks repeatadly amoungst the burnt beaches of the 4 islands just south of Neihram. No being dares to enter the mist lands of the south - conquered by the Chronic Sage, the islands ly under his occupation. They say that the Sage was born from the devil, no human dares to speak of him, no creature has the mind to understand his wrath and no eye ever wishes to glanced at him for he is more evil than evil itself. His armour heavily dense, stained with the blood from the War of The Mist Lands. Imbued with the power of the nether realm Gods, he slaughtered an entire nation in one night. Powerful, dangerous and immortal he remains...
What you think?
Copyright limited,
P.T.
Within the abandoned realms of the Kaag King's lands lays very little life. For the mojority of the time, the only sound is but gushing winds tossing and turning the rotten leaves from beneath the dead oak trees. The dry, cracked landscape of Neihram will once again be home to the most feared and elite warriors ever to be risen by a Kaag King. Evil lurks repeatadly amoungst the burnt beaches of the 4 islands just south of Neihram. No being dares to enter the mist lands of the south - conquered by the Chronic Sage, the islands ly under his occupation. They say that the Sage was born from the devil, no human dares to speak of him, no creature has the mind to understand his wrath and no eye ever wishes to glanced at him for he is more evil than evil itself. His armour heavily dense, stained with the blood from the War of The Mist Lands. Imbued with the power of the nether realm Gods, he slaughtered an entire nation in one night. Powerful, dangerous and immortal he remains...
What you think?
Copyright limited,
P.T.
