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Celti-sh Hero! First Page of a fanmade Manga

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DELAYED!! Learning process first ;)


Hoya guys!!

I'm pretty much happy to show you the first page of my fan made Celtic heroes Manga!
Manga will be called "Celt-ish Hero". First chapter will threat the begginer quest until castle...and then it might change a bit haha

I'm gona be slow publishing pages (1 a week max) as i'm quite new into this , and don't have much time to do it:/ Seriously it took me ages to make this one haha. I need to learn how to draw most of the scene, then train, then do the final draft. Then i ink it, and send it to photoshop ( almost never used it, so it was messy and hard lol)


Feel free to tell me what's wrong on it, i'll be happy to learn if some other players are skilled in drawings!! And i'm definitively aware of many problems, misconception and errors i did here, but well, i also need to move on the next page so...itll be this way;)
Feel also free to caption it, I'm not a native English speaker so quite lame at making interesting texts! Could be fun if some of you find a nicer way to write it down!

Hope you guys liked!
thanks
One of your's fellow guide...
..fr3gryf

first page:
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PS: i usually post sneak peak of the drawings on fr3gryf's instagram. feel free to check ;)

Happy gaming!
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Re: Celti-sh Hero! First Page of a fanmade Manga

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Awesome! Keep it up :)
Feel free to tell me what's wrong in it
The Warrior's face looks stupid, you copycat :lol:

Thing is, at this sluggish rate of 1 page per week, you'll need around 5 months to complete 20 pages (roughly a chapter). You should increase the drawing speed. If you can, try to make it around 5pg/wk instead of 1pg/wk. If you go to school, draw in class like I always do :o

And you don't put exclamation marks before the actual word unless it's like in these examples:
!! That hurts! Hey why did you hit me blah blah blah....
Or
..!! What was that? A meteorite? I gotta see it!
And was there an oil spillage or what? Water isn't that dark. It's supposed to be more of a lighter color, but definitely not white or black. Light grey is better ;)

Warrior starting gloves have steel and leather. Color in the leather, and lightly shade in the steel! Also, there's a second steel plate on it.

Then look at the Warrior's Greaves. The metal playes aren't that spaced out, but in fact like an inch or two away from each other.

His boots aren't white. They're dark brown.

The red cloth doesn't cover that much of his torso.

Hope this helps (and doesn't delay the next page)!




However, overall the drawing's great :D
(And sorry for the mistake search! :lol:)
LordyIsBack - Lvl 121+ Warrior
Clan Prophecy (World Danu)
I'm taking a break from CH until the next questline is released. Possibly this next beta.

Re: Celti-sh Hero! First Page of a fanmade Manga

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Ahaha was wondering when u would come lol
The Warrior's face looks stupid, you copycat :lol:
Yeah ik, sadely it's my actual drawing skills :/ drawing a head+neck only is fine but putting it on a body always look weird when i do it :/ It'll improve on the next pages nw , let me learn haha.
But ty for the feedback


Thing is, at this sluggish rate of 1 page per week, you'll need around 5 months to complete 20 pages (roughly a chapter). You should increase the drawing speed. If you can, try to make it around 5pg/wk instead of 1pg/wk. If you go to school, draw in class like I always do :o

AH AH AH ;) sadely can't because of time :/ i do all the drafts in school ( i did all for the next page this morning ;) , sneak peak of the first pannel :
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And ill do the final drawing tonight. But this is only the easy part lol

it take me 3 to 4 times for the inking ( as all u do cannot be erased, need to be precised and sure of what you do)
and then the photoshop part...oh god...i never used photoshop before so it took me the whole week hahah

So yeah, actually ill stick to 1 page a week, mabe will do more in the future (eg 2) but can't speed up more :/
And i'll be 10-12 page for this short chapter. Got the story for the second but unsure yet to do it..anyway it wont be soon
And you don't put exclamation marks before the actual word unless it's like in these examples:
!! That hurts! Hey why did you hit me blah blah blah....
Or
..!! What was that? A meteorite? I gotta see it!
Mmmh ya you are right, ill change those dialogs anyway! ty for info!
And was there an oil spillage or what? Water isn't that dark. It's supposed to be more of a lighter color, but definitely not white or black. Light grey is better ;)
Got you point, now you tell it i see it lol :) ill change it later once ill do the photoshop of page 2
Thanks!!
Warrior starting gloves have steel and leather. Color in the leather, and lightly shade in the steel! Also, there's a second steel plate on it.
His boots aren't white. They're dark brown.
Oh ya right! I had a hard time doing those tone but you are truely right, ill try to change it either :) TY
The red cloth doesn't cover that much of his torso.
Then look at the Warrior's Greaves. The metal playes aren't that spaced out, but in fact like an inch or two away from each other.
Ya you are right, tho i can't change it on this page, ill do better on the next one ;)
However, overall the drawing's great :D
Thanks for all man ;)
Good starting . I myself is no good at this, but i read manga sometime . Its a good starting. Hehe good work. :D :) :lol:
TY hehe! manga are soo fun anyway

Oooooo :o this looks interesting :3
TYYY;)
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Re: Celti-sh Hero! First Page of a fanmade Manga

#6
This is awesome! :o

A few improvements:
  • Make the text box "Next time, I'll ask a rowboat" bigger.
  • Check your grammar. ;)
  • Not sure what actually hit the person on the second to last image -- is it a stick? I can't see where it's coming from.
But honestly, this looks really promising! I think you could do some great things with this. I look forward to the next one! :D
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Re: Celti-sh Hero! First Page of a fanmade Manga

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This is awesome! :o

A few improvements:
  • Make the text box "Next time, I'll ask a rowboat" bigger.
  • Check your grammar. ;)
  • Not sure what actually hit the person on the second to last image -- is it a stick? I can't see where it's coming from.
But honestly, this looks really promising! I think you could do some great things with this. I look forward to the next one! :D
Thank's Vold!

Yeah, text isn't final, still trying to figure out how to say things better ;)
Oki ill make it bigger, ty for info :)

Grammar...rhaaa :lol:

it was technically a stick, ill try to be more precise

thanks for all the infos!!
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